Haiku winner: ‘the commute’

The topic of the week’s contest was the commute and the winning poem is by Lynne Rees:

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Monday morning

we share

each other’s rain

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“This could be read as a grouse,” notes our judge Jim Kacian, “But the words contain more: the poet chooses not to be isolated in that rain, but to share it and when we all share it, it is no longer the elements against us, but rather the elements uniting us in a common lot and a common fate.”

The first runner-up is this poem by Bradley Byington:

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Grey sky, autumn drizzle

Grey cars on grey pavement –

A blue-eyed passer-by

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“Blue isn’t the sharpest contrast to grey – in fact, it might be barely distinguishable – but in the context it comes as a shock,” says Mr Kacian. “At the very least there is something there to arrest the eye. And a passer-by – someone going, presumably, in the other direction. What does she know that I don’t? And I want to find out.”

Evan Flaschen, our second runner-up, by managed to find a little humour in the “deadening of the soul” – a theme among almost all the poems that we received.

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Motorway to work

I curse while contemplating

the road less travelled

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Next week’s topic is the workplace accident.

For details of how to enter, go to www.ft.com/haiku

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